Yes, I'm still sick. But I had this prepared before, thankfully. It's all part of Brenda Drake's Can You Hit A Perfect Pitch? Blogfest. I don't imagine I will get around much to the bloghopping/critiquing part of the game unless I'm miraculously cured in the next day, but feel free to comment on my entry below. We are supposed to have a 2 sentence pitch (no more than 35 words) and the first 150 words of the manuscript. Hope you enjoy! (Oh, and I moved the Monday blog crit to Tuesday in hopes that I've recovered more.)
Genre: MG Low Fantasy
Word Count: 67,000
Pitch: When Mina's magic doesn't come in like the other witches, she discovers she was switched at birth. Her quest to find the real witch leads her to choices that will change the magic world forever.
Even her mother’s best Patience spell couldn’t keep Mina from pacing her room. In less than sixty minutes, she would celebrate the thirteenth hour of her thirteenth birthday, and her magic would finally flow from her fingertips. She would show everyone once and for all that she was not a weirdo in the world of witches.
Mina moved to the Mystic Revealer again. She didn’t want to be the type of girl that stared endlessly into a mirror, but this object showed more than her reflection; it showed traces of magic. Like she did most mornings, she first straightened her hair, then searched the outline of her image looking for any sign, small as it may be, of her magic leaking. This time she expected to see something different – a glint of what lurked beneath, a shimmer around her reflection – but the Mystic Revealer didn’t show anything but the same old Mina.
21 comments:
I really like the beginning! Poor Mina.
I did have to reread the pitch to understand it. It has to do with this part "switched at birth with a mortal girl" it sounds like the other girl is the mortal.
I'm with Southpaw. I like the beginning. But the pitch got me confused about who was switched for whom.
And I love witch stories ;)
The first sentence hooked me!
Well done!
OMG, you're right! I've fixed it. Does it make more sense now?
Oh, you are so right! I changed it. Does it make more sense now?
Ooo, yes I like that and it keeps the mystery that she's mortal too.
Thank you! I really appreciate your help!
It sure does ;)
Thanks! So appreciate the feedback :)
This is great! I love witches and to have your MC being the only NON-magical person is fresh!
Great job!
Excellent pitch. I like the spin on the usual "odd one out" trope. Hope you get well soon too!
I love stories about magic in MG books. It sounds like a great pitch to me :)
I love your premise and especially the part about "magic leaking." Your first sentence set me up for your world here, with the Patience spell part. I would definitely read on!
This is great! I love it and totally want to read it! Is this what you got the requested full for?
Thanks, Janet! I appreciate your feedback :)
Thank you! I hope the agents like it too. (chews fingernails)
I am feeling better. Thanks for the well wishes.
Thank you, Coleen. I'm glad you like it :)
Yay! I'm glad you like it! Thanks :)
Thanks! And yes, I'm up to three requests for fulls now! That's pretty good for one week, right?
That is totally awesome! REALLY good news and strong evidence that your book is terrific! Good luck!!! (At least something good happened in your flu-y week :))
I love it. I was totally hooked. Congratulations of your request for full manuscripts. I cannot wait until it is published. Good luck!
Yay! And I'm up to 6 requests! Let's hope...:)
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